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Jul 15, 2011 14:30:37 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 15, 2011 14:30:37 GMT -5
Is this just for fanfic or could I post some extracts of some of my work here to be criticised and help me improve them? (so sorry that this is kinda technically off topic(but ill edit the post with an extract if im allowed))
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Jul 15, 2011 15:19:32 GMT -5
Post by Magna on Jul 15, 2011 15:19:32 GMT -5
Actually I see no problem with it *green light*
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Jul 16, 2011 7:44:09 GMT -5
Post by Magna on Jul 16, 2011 7:44:09 GMT -5
Hm it's interesting
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Jul 16, 2011 14:12:31 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 16, 2011 14:12:31 GMT -5
xD, thanks, I guess. It's hard to create a unique world for something like that especially 'cos i originally wrote it for nanowrimo so i was hurried.
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Jul 16, 2011 14:15:11 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 16, 2011 14:15:11 GMT -5
I deleted it cos i dun likes it anyways, im thinking of writing a digimon-y story soon.
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Jul 16, 2011 22:41:31 GMT -5
Post by Magna on Jul 16, 2011 22:41:31 GMT -5
well I created an Original Continuity once...
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Jul 17, 2011 5:06:42 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 17, 2011 5:06:42 GMT -5
Your fic?
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Jul 17, 2011 11:23:15 GMT -5
Post by Magna on Jul 17, 2011 11:23:15 GMT -5
no like an original world in of itself...
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Jul 18, 2011 15:06:10 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 18, 2011 15:06:10 GMT -5
nice
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Jul 18, 2011 20:31:37 GMT -5
Post by Magna on Jul 18, 2011 20:31:37 GMT -5
there was a lot of knives, guns, parkour, and the occasional explosion
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Jul 19, 2011 10:15:25 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 19, 2011 10:15:25 GMT -5
I've become real interested in adding parkour to any of my stories, I just think it can be a great descriptive scene.
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Jul 19, 2011 12:01:58 GMT -5
Post by Magna on Jul 19, 2011 12:01:58 GMT -5
it goes great with fight scenes it allows for alot of flips and dodges and slides
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Jul 19, 2011 14:28:46 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 19, 2011 14:28:46 GMT -5
I have trouble explaining a flip, cos it always ends up sounding amatuer.
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Jul 19, 2011 22:29:46 GMT -5
Post by Magna on Jul 19, 2011 22:29:46 GMT -5
With athletic grace, he propelled himself into the air, tucking his head and knees and ending with a flip behind the man; he grabbed the man by the neck and cracked it.
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Jul 21, 2011 11:25:58 GMT -5
Post by talmon on Jul 21, 2011 11:25:58 GMT -5
Thats a good way to explain a flip xD
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